Comments on: Free CLIMAX Edit: Anonymous http://victoriamixon.com/2010/02/04/free-edit-4/ Wed, 08 Sep 2010 14:51:17 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Kathryn http://victoriamixon.com/2010/02/04/free-edit-4/comment-page-1/#comment-2852 Kathryn Sat, 06 Feb 2010 13:16:22 +0000 http://victoriamixon.com/?p=4205#comment-2852 I need to brush up on my warlock lore. Control of the elements, huh? Then it would be just as terrifying to see a mist begin to seep in around the edges of the door! That would certainly motivate me to push harder! But again, I do like how the focus is on the struggle to keep the door closed. The door is everything! You asked for it. Now here it is: My gnarled, green fingers simply cannot scrub another floor, wall or cabinet! K I need to brush up on my warlock lore. Control of the elements, huh?
Then it would be just as terrifying to see a mist begin to seep in around the edges of the door! That would certainly motivate me to push harder! But again, I do like how the focus is on the struggle to keep the door closed. The door is everything!

You asked for it. Now here it is: My gnarled, green fingers simply cannot scrub another floor, wall or cabinet!

K

]]> By: Victoria http://victoriamixon.com/2010/02/04/free-edit-4/comment-page-1/#comment-2841 Victoria Fri, 05 Feb 2010 22:21:44 +0000 http://victoriamixon.com/?p=4205#comment-2841 Oh, good, Jordan! I will put something up about being anonymous. I think you hit the nail on the head when you mentioned it to me as being "nerve-wracking." It's very hard to put your baby out there in front of you-have-no-idea-how-many strangers. You guys are all very brave. And, yeah, I thought maybe it was the wind or the night or a storm or something pushing on the door because the warlock has some control over "elements." But now I want to see Kathryn <del datetime="2010-02-05T22:21:53+00:00">do</del> WRITE---I want to see her WRITE---something with a gnarled, green finger! She's a great writer. Oh, good, Jordan! I will put something up about being anonymous. I think you hit the nail on the head when you mentioned it to me as being “nerve-wracking.” It’s very hard to put your baby out there in front of you-have-no-idea-how-many strangers. You guys are all very brave.

And, yeah, I thought maybe it was the wind or the night or a storm or something pushing on the door because the warlock has some control over “elements.”

But now I want to see Kathryn do WRITE—I want to see her WRITE—something with a gnarled, green finger! She’s a great writer.

]]> By: Jordan http://victoriamixon.com/2010/02/04/free-edit-4/comment-page-1/#comment-2840 Jordan Fri, 05 Feb 2010 21:53:00 +0000 http://victoriamixon.com/?p=4205#comment-2840 I just imagined it was an invisible force pushing on the door, rather than a concrete being. That might be clearer in context. (And personally, I'm fine with anonymous edits!) I just imagined it was an invisible force pushing on the door, rather than a concrete being. That might be clearer in context.

(And personally, I’m fine with anonymous edits!)

]]> By: Victoria http://victoriamixon.com/2010/02/04/free-edit-4/comment-page-1/#comment-2836 Victoria Fri, 05 Feb 2010 17:36:45 +0000 http://victoriamixon.com/?p=4205#comment-2836 As Flannery O'Connor said, "You can do anything in fiction you can get away with. Unfortunately, nobody's ever gotten away with much." I liked that we couldn't see what was on the other side of the door. The sense of blindness added to the tension for me. But, yes, you could have heightened the sense of invasion by allowing some part of the whatever-it-was to cross the boundary Anthony was fighting to hold. Just keep in mind <em>why</em> you're doing it, so you can decide exactly what to do, how much, and what result to get. As Flannery O’Connor said, “You can do anything in fiction you can get away with. Unfortunately, nobody’s ever gotten away with much.”

I liked that we couldn’t see what was on the other side of the door. The sense of blindness added to the tension for me.

But, yes, you could have heightened the sense of invasion by allowing some part of the whatever-it-was to cross the boundary Anthony was fighting to hold. Just keep in mind why you’re doing it, so you can decide exactly what to do, how much, and what result to get.

]]> By: Kathryn http://victoriamixon.com/2010/02/04/free-edit-4/comment-page-1/#comment-2835 Kathryn Fri, 05 Feb 2010 17:29:18 +0000 http://victoriamixon.com/?p=4205#comment-2835 It's very interesting to read such a small part of someone's work and still get so much out of it. I thought the original was very exciting, but agree that squash and sack of cement jostled me a little bit. I was very into what was happening on the human side of the door and could imagine the man's feet sliding backward into the triangle!!!! SO SCAREY!! My question: Would it have been a suitable choice to describe what was happening on the other side of the door. Should we get to see a gnarled, green finger emerge from the crack between the door and the door frame? Is it better to keep the focus on one side of the door? I like that the door created a distinct line - but would it have been okay to cross it? Kathryn It’s very interesting to read such a small part of someone’s work and still get so much out of it. I thought the original was very exciting, but agree that squash and sack of cement jostled me a little bit.

I was very into what was happening on the human side of the door and could imagine the man’s feet sliding backward into the triangle!!!! SO SCAREY!!

My question: Would it have been a suitable choice to describe what was happening on the other side of the door. Should we get to see a gnarled, green finger emerge from the crack between the door and the door frame? Is it better to keep the focus on one side of the door? I like that the door created a distinct line – but would it have been okay to cross it?

Kathryn

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